Volume 3 – Chapter 4-3

And the climax begins! Hope you’ll like it.

At the alpha-draft phase, this part was rather short, but after reviewing it, I made everything longer, pushed some things in a new, fifth chapter, and then I was happy enough to leave it like that.

Next part will continue where it left off, and an artwork will be included. I’m not sure when I’ll be able to post it, this and next week gonna be busy so it may be hard to keep track of all the work I’m doing for this story atm.

Please vote on TWF! Just takes a moment, no account or anything else, but it’ll help this story’s publicity.

Advertisements

Volume 3 – Chapter 4-2

Please vote on TWF! Just takes a moment, no account or anything else, but it’ll help this story’s publicity.

And the second part of the fourth chapter, we’re looking at the situation between Yoshimura, Hoshibashi, and the alfar. Poor Aera’jos, he may be a bit racist (or more like speciesist, since he’d get along with other alfr races), but… actually, poor Yoshimura and Hoshibashi! You guys are actually reasonable!

It’s a very valuable insight in what alfar of the fantasy world are like, but many of these characteristics are also perceivable when looking at Ara’ainn, she’s just… less wild. But there is a reason, why people don’t visit the alfar much.

Next part will begin with Kenta and the girls in the actual village of Aroahenn, and that part will be on the longer side. But now things are rolling and they will not stop until the very end.
I don’t expect that we’ll be able to finish the proofreading soon enough for me to post it this week. My weekend is just pretty full this time.

On another side, I got some people to help me reworking the older chapters in terms of proofreading. Will be the first step towards using other sites to spread this story, together with the rework of Volume 1’s cover.

There will be little changes here and there, but you don’t need to reread everything just to keep track. It’s more about aligning some things here and there and using some suggestions, questions, and feedback I got from you (my readers) to make things clearer.

Have a nice week! 😉

Volume 3 – Chapter 4-1

And it’s out, for some reason these last changes were what took most, so we already moved to the next part in terms of proofreading and it’ll be on time. This time we bring the relationship between Kenta and Ara’ainn on a very, very physical level. Even Rine has a part in it.

The rewrite of the former parts are still staggering, mostly out of proofread concerns, but I’ll ask the new established group on RRL, who more or less is dedicated to edit and proofread the stuff the authors have to better the quality on RRL. Such brave people!

Next time, we have a part that won’t include either of our MCs. It’s about Hoshibashi and Yoshimura. Should be out in less than a week this time… I hope. ^^’

Answer to the question whether to change the tense or not

For those who didn’t know: I was considering rewriting the story into past tense and I now have reached the decision: I won’t.

Now I’ll go a bit into the details: I start because of a native reader and writer I like and who invited me into a group of others writers, who complained about the tense, after finally starting volume 3 after a break. He was a bit disillusioned because I had some proper proofreading and a better grasp of the English language at that point, which means: My use of present tense was more constant (because in my native tongue, the use of tenses is more fluent). He told me, that present tense is jarring to read, and that it’ll be hard to continue as a reader this way.

This made me thinking, but I needed more input. I asked other native speakers (like my proofreaders), then I asked my readers on RRL (since I have about 900 followers there now), to get more input.

Finally, I decided to try rewriting some parts on my PC, to see how it works. And even after editing and rewriting, etc., it was no good. Too much work, too many changes in wording, the change of flow, it’s clear as day, that this would blow this hobby out of proportion.

For those who like past tense more, I’m sorry. But please put up with this. ^^’ I try out something else, which should address you, but I won’t go into details, before I’m sure it’ll be possible.

Volume 3 – Chapter 3-2

And here is the second and final part of chapter 3.And here is the second and final part of chapter 3. Things are still going quiet, it’s more about the characters than the plot, but the relationship between them is quite important as well.

Hope that New Year went well for you, and that 2017 will be the blast. While some bad things happened in 2016, many good things also happened, it’s sad that you have to look on the internet to learn such amazing things like how the population of pandas (now taken off from the endangered list) and tigers, the fight against Ebola, and such. Look up “Good Things that Happened in 2016” and you get many, many lists with amazing news, that somehow had a hard time appearing in the news… Get some optimism back! 😉

Now that Volume 3 have all illustrations finished, MioChin and I will finally make the final adjustments on Kyou’s and Rine’s character designs and maybe the remake of the cover of Volume 1 will be finished before the third volume ends… which would mean, that I can start my expansion on more sites. 😉

My proofreaders are coming back from their own New Year, so I hope to return to a somewhat weekly release schedule.

And finally: Please vote on TWF! 😀